The Two-Slice Toaster Move

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Fun piece to read. I enjoyed it more than the 2nd and 3rd place winners. Keep writing.

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

Definitely the best piece! I

Definitely the best piece! I agree it could be expanded into a larger piece to let the reader learn why the characters moved so much and what precipitated this particular move. Great writing!

Susan Thompson more than 6 years ago

Definitely the best

Your writing is concise and clear. Very descriptive.

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

Wonderful

This is a very nice piece. It could have been penned by Tobias Wolff. Well done.

Russ, open your mind... a thousand things happen in this story!

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

My favourite

Of the top three, this one's my pick. Great, evocative story, and that last "every" tells us so much that's unsaid in the story, more even than the two, fantastic final sentences. Congratulations!

Dan more than 6 years ago

Admirable

To create such vivid characters and evoke such memorable images in so few words is a truly admirable gift, I'd love to read more by this writer.

Laurie more than 6 years ago

Sigh

Oh Russ.
Some people need action packed movies with easy plots and explosions. Others prefer the quiet unfolding of beauty. Both have their place. If it doesn't resonate with you, why not write one for us in the next contest?

Erin more than 7 years ago

I want more too--I think it's

I want more too--I think it's brilliant and as a fellow Smithereen with an eccentric mother I can sooo relate. Juicy writing and I loved the characterizations.

Joanne more than 7 years ago

What? of course you want more!

How can you think this story is good? Of course you want more! nothing freaking happens! Can you even call this a story? I fell asleep twice while reading this.

Russ more than 7 years ago

So...

what happens next??? :)

Judy more than 7 years ago

3rd prize?

This is by far the most brilliant piece of the lot. Well done!

Deepam more than 7 years ago

The Two-slice Toaster Move

Jane is one very talented writer and should have won first prize.
Beautifully written - hope to see more of her work.
Congratulations!!

"bluebell" more than 7 years ago

well written!

This one could easily be expanded on to let us know all the factors that were hinted at. I feel empathy for the child and also the mother. My mind is whirling with possibilities! I agree that this could be a longer piece, a novel even.

Kristi more than 7 years ago

I absolutely love it and I

I absolutely love it and I need to know more.

Jennifer more than 7 years ago

Should have taken first

Should have taken first place! This is the only one I see as a "winning" story. Good job.

Anonymous more than 7 years ago

love it!

This could be expanded into a novel. Congratulations!

Anonymous more than 7 years ago

Beautiful

What a wonderful wonderful piece. Thank you so much for your writing and congratulations!

Janet more than 7 years ago

Two Slice Toaster Move

I was so moved by this one, I couldn't read it aloud to my husband.
So well done.
:(

Jane Says more than 7 years ago

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