We Are Electric

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"twice rejected and doubly

"twice rejected and doubly lost, objects orphaned by their owners and then by the sea."

Love that line! Nice piece of work!

Lisa more than 6 years ago

"I drew a line in the sand

"I drew a line in the sand with my big toe. 'You can erase what you don’t like.'" I agree with Laurie about the subtext. Whatever disagreement the characters have is portrayed quickly and eloquently here. A beauty, this is.

Jocelyn more than 6 years ago

Hmmm...I didn't expect that

Hmmm...I didn't expect that ending at all! Well done.

islander more than 6 years ago

Beautiful.

Beautiful.

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

excellent. deep thoughts

excellent. deep thoughts

Gloria more than 6 years ago

excellent

excellent

Gloria more than 6 years ago

Very deep thoughts.
excellent

Very deep thoughts.
excellent

Gloria more than 6 years ago

"The world shrank into a

"The world shrank into a small square"- this is exactly what this postcard story accomplishes. stunning.

Brooke Lockyer more than 6 years ago

loved the title and the story

loved the title and the story

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

I like the subtext, so much

I like the subtext, so much can be interpreted about this couple (doomed to an imminent break-up or an unfulfilled future together) "A man lost at sea, a woman trapped on land" is perfect.

Laurie more than 6 years ago

Brutal and beautiful.

Brutal and beautiful.

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

captured the imagination.

captured the imagination. Short and poignant.

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

Good plot/character

Good plot/character development considering the short word limit but writing should be unexpected. Everything about this piece is what you would expect. Point and case, "His shorts ballooned like a parachute." You only have five hundred words. Please make each one interesting.

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

What a wonderful short story!

What a wonderful short story! It painted the emotions and relationship
of these two characters so vividly!

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

maybe, something had ignited

maybe, something had ignited

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

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