Spring Training

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Wow... disturbing.

Wow... disturbing.

jhod more than 5 years ago

The beginning is great. The

The beginning is great. The ending? Not so much.

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

Arm

I think her arm is sore because of all the painting, her version of "spring training", a passive-aggressive way of protesting Gramps' bikini sojourns. The colours go from blue to yellow, pink, green, then brown. From brilliant to drab. She's running out of colours. And her arm's just plain worn out.

Zia more than 6 years ago

beautifully written prose, it

beautifully written prose, it is no surprise this is first place

Joseph more than 6 years ago

I think the granma really had

I think the granma really had a stroke and she did not want to tell the boy that... In general it seemed disturbing but it is certainly well written and transmits us to the place. I liked the point of the passing of time. I just can't see how it suits the postcard genre?

Anonymous more than 6 years ago

2nd reading

I found this story unseasonaby good.

DougO more than 7 years ago

Nanny's story

Delightful and haunting!

Minda more than 7 years ago

If you didn't like this

If you didn't like this story, you've probably missed the metaphor!

Anonymous more than 7 years ago

Not every story needs...

A beginning, middle, and end. Or at least a very clear one. Paterson's great at creating this idea of distance between the grandfather and grandmother. The pen metaphor was a nice touch, if I'm reading into it correctly. It's a very "layered" story. Would love to hear the writer's thoughts on it.

Anonymous more than 7 years ago

Mark Paterson's 'Spring Training'

Brilliantly succinct yet rich in detail.
Indicating the passing of time via the different coloured walls was a wonderful meter.
(It's perfectly clear to ME why Grandma's holding her arm...I'd be pretty pissed if MY wife played such a trick on ME...despite the 'playfulness' of the intent)
Well done Mr. Paterson!! Congrats!!

Graham Greer more than 7 years ago

hmm

I found this story Disturbing.

But definitely not boring. A lot happened for such a short story.

DougO more than 7 years ago

it was cute, but not that

it was cute, but not that great, i don't understand why it won first place. it starts strong but ends abruptly, and not in a good or interesting way.

Anonymous more than 7 years ago

Mark Petterson's postcard story

Boring! it might be nice if something actually happened in the story.

Anonymous more than 7 years ago

Great atmosphere...

Great style and pacing.
Really transported me to the time and place.
Look forward to more from Mr. Paterson.

Anonymous more than 7 years ago

great postcard story

Thanks. Well done. I really like the details.

One question:
Why's grandma holding her arm? Did she have a stroke. Did grandpa grab her hard. I like them mystery. Well done.

Kathy Murphy more than 7 years ago

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