Smithereens

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This is fantastic! You start

This is fantastic! You start it off with a promise of Jazz and the whole structure bops with heat like it's Hard Bop and cools suddenly at various turns - what a fantastic rhythm!

This is a poem you could nestle into, make your home and find new things around every corner.

Ryan more than 10 years ago

Excellent.
I love the line

Excellent.
I love the line "when your kindness comes exposed"

Gaylene more than 10 years ago

i love the rhythm. i had to

i love the rhythm. i had to read this out loud because it's so beautiful. has my vote.

Anonymous more than 10 years ago

Like how it all whips

Like how it all whips forward, each turn unexpected but the heartstrings tied back to the sweater.

I walk, I turn down an empty block to
(verb)(subject)(object) of my affection.

great sounds and fresh.

Anonymous more than 11 years ago

I like this a lot. It works

I like this a lot. It works well and flows nicely.

Anonymous more than 11 years ago